Jarmyn Enterprise Space Pitch practice

malcolmjarmyn

Greetings,
i am devoloping a pitch deck for the first of my projects. This is for a new propulsioins system for launch vehicles and other craft.

Troy

Great work taking the first step mate!

You’ll need to change the permissions so we can see the document you’ve linked. Looking forward to seeing what you’ve got!

malcolmjarmyn

my new pitch

malcolmjarmyn

The pitch deck is on hold at the moment, my team of volunteers have been busy working on the project. First planned engine testing is in December. If I can afford it.

Troy

Hi @malcolmjarmyn ! Your document isn’t public so we can’t see it. 🙂

malcolmjarmyn

my latest pitch

Troy

This is a huge improvement, mate. Great work!

The top 3 things (not an exhaustive list):

This is more polished than before, but I’m not getting a sense of your team’s credibility or what progress has actually been made. Have you manufactured working prototype parts or have any of your team developed rockets before? What makes your team the best in the world for bringing this to life?
I still can’t see any indication that you have a business model in mind, or a deep understanding/theory about your market
Your financial slide at the end looks entirely made up. Are you really saying you’ll have $1m+ in expenses next year (2021)? Where will you get this money?